Barry is a dedicated member of the Pudsey writers group and has contributed a great deal to the Relay project. At last weeks workshop he read out this response to some of the writing from the Time Together group:
The simplicity and integrity of the pieces impressed me most of all.
The work as a whole was as varied as the individuals writing the pieces.
The language didn’t bother me. I saw this struggle to master a foreign language – a difficult language and something l’m incapable of – as an inspiration to us.
This quaint, these oddities, of language/s also gave the pieces an air of authenticity.
The two pieces that especially impressed me were…
a).. The Kite The grammar was excellent, but that was not the point really.
It showed not only a true understanding of English grammar and vocabulary, but also embodied the essence of poetry’. It said something beyond the words.
In my opinion, if your mind is geared in such a way, one finds it easy to make up rhymes, and then you often think you’ve created a poem, but it takes a poet to say something beyond those rhymes; to express what you are really trying to say. I find it an incredibly difficult and lengthy process to write poetry.
b)..A piece by Kahlid… ‘In the very hot summer…’ it begins and goes on to describe in a very down beat, succinct way the horrendous environment of his country.
I felt humbled after reading it. In England we grumble…but he didn’t, he just got on with life…wow ! ! ! The honest integrity and humility of the account overrode the lack of accuracy in his English.
I try to write as I talk, sometimes it’s as successful as Kahlid, other times it comes across as a bit laboured, but I try not to let it become self-consciously ‘Yorkshire accent’. Kahlid was quite un-self-conscious in his language. Some truly poetic phases/expressions came out.
‘My father had joined the hawks in the hills’, I believe he wrote.
His illustration of the fig tree…
… marvelous touches, I thought.
Of all the writers he is the one I’d like to be able emulate.
The others showed different life styles…
The Sudanese Wedding Ceremonies
Going to School for the First Time’ was quite touching, I thought.
The guy who educated himself from grass roots up seemed quite a guy. He’d obviously taken all the courses I’d taken (I recognised Belbin and Maslow) but he’d gone much further than me. One wonders how many there out there who have a similar potential, but not the chance…or in England, one wonders about the one’s who don’t take the chance…
Barry Fox
Molly’s Auntie Rhoda and Uncle Jim







